A 100 word scene from my current WIP "Undeclared"
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_“So what do you think?” Margot asked, gesturing at the dome above them.

“Oh, that’s pretty cool. The way he designed the beams and rafters, it looks as if there are sails billowing from enormous masts,” Luke said.

“This is one of the most significant architectural structures in the city, we thought you would enjoy it,” Carrie said.

“No, it’s really nice. That’s very thoughtful, thank you,” Luke said.

Margot tilted her head. “You seem less excited than I expected.”

“It’s not that. I do like it. It’s just that I’ve decided to change majors. I’m dropping out of Architecture.”

ron pruitt
1/20/2012 12:52:42 am

I like that you told the story entirely with dialog. But you've managed some good description as well. Good writing.
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1/20/2012 03:00:11 am

I wonder what made him choose to switch his major. Intriguing snippet, Wakefield. :)

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1/20/2012 03:02:00 am

This reminds me of my high school aged daughter - she teeters between medical field and architecture - not that I, at age 42, know what I want to do with my life...

Thank you for sharing.

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1/20/2012 03:08:19 am

Ha! My daughter majored in Architecture -- after changing her major a couple of times! So, I can relate and loved the last line. Well told, Wakefield!

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1/20/2012 09:53:13 am

Sounds like this is just the beginning of a good story.
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1/20/2012 11:46:27 am

Oops! :)

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1/22/2012 01:07:06 am

It sounds like he is having an inferiority moment. I wonder if it is a passing thing. Well done!

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1/23/2012 03:55:25 am

Dear Wakefield,

Switching majors. Nice metaphor for other things. I like your use of dialog and description. A well paced and structured work.

Aloha,

Doug

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1/24/2012 03:25:43 pm

Oh that must be a bummer for Margot and Carrie!
I wonder what made him do that..
Good exchange of dialogues... the ending is a good surprise... leaves a lot of unanswered qsns and possibilities... One of the clever ways to keep an 100 worder lasting in the reader's memory! :)

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and
http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/01/20/destiny/

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