I was ruminating on an article about dystopian futures when this scene popped into my head.  Check out more stories at Madison Wood's Friday Fictioneers
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Grandpa gazed at the darkened sky, the light of that celestial orb muted by the clouds.
"What are you thinking about Grandpa?"
"The good ol'days."
Grandma clucked her tongue.  "Don't pay your grandfather any mind, Roger.  Every generation regales their chldren with tales about the old days as if they were somehow better than today: more moral, more promising.  But the old days had their troubles too.
"Yes, I suppose your're right Margaret. "  Grandpa's shoulders slumped slightly as he walked back inside the house and removed his gas mask and containment suit.  "I just get sentimental on bright sunny days I guess."

5/11/2012 06:31:40 am

This is a bittersweet futuristic twist and I like it! Just a little typo to take care of when "Grandpa\s shoulder's slumped slightly as--- walked back inside" You left out "he" - easily done with all the editing we have to do on these!
Yours as ever,
Lindaura
http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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Wakefield
5/11/2012 06:37:17 am

Hello Laura,
Thank you for your kind comments and your sharp I. I shall correct this draft with haste. :)

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Wakefield Mahon
5/11/2012 06:43:56 am

It says something about how tired I am that I can't even spell "eye" correctly. *Need caffeine*

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5/11/2012 06:48:04 am

So subtle I just about missed it. Excellent flash, and really... maybe sometimes they WERE better days!

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Wakefield
5/11/2012 06:50:26 am

I aim for subtle. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by Jen!

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5/11/2012 07:03:25 am

Whoa! I think the good old days were better in this case. Didn't anticipate that end. Totally thought it was your typical old folks tale, but you got me. Nice work.

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5/11/2012 07:21:04 am

A nice family setting, and a comparison of two worlds. Yes, the old days had their problems too.

Please, I believe you left out 'he' from the last but one sentence. Mine is here:

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5/11/2012 07:22:38 am

Ops! I left out my url: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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5/11/2012 07:29:16 am

Great twist! So nicely done, Wakefield. Bravo

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5/11/2012 07:29:18 am

Wow. Not sure what I was expecting here but it was awesomely done. So matter-of-fact a way of looking at a world gone horribly wrong as just being one of those things. Excellence!

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5/11/2012 08:26:33 am

Ah, neat little twist - great dialog that made it seem so homespun, and then post-apocalyptic. Very nicely done.

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5/11/2012 09:19:59 am

Awesome twist there! I never saw that one coming. I'd be longing for the "good ol' days" too if I was Grandpa.

My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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5/11/2012 09:26:30 am

An original take on the prompt. A dreadful thought that it might come to that. Well done.

Mine's at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/you-called-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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5/11/2012 09:36:04 am

Oh, love it. Great little twist, gotta love dystopian stuff! Here's mine. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/05/11/friday-fictioneers-2/

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5/11/2012 09:58:25 am

this is nice, like the age old qn: was it really better in the old days? But good old nostalgia eh?... here's mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/friday-fictioneers-then-we-were-one/

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5/11/2012 11:42:51 am

Nice twist. Destroy the World has become a sub-genre hasn't it? Here's my link: http://melodypearson.com/flash-fiction/friday-fictioneers-photo-prompt/

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5/11/2012 11:51:03 am

LOL this is fantastic! loved loved it.

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5/11/2012 02:02:03 pm

OH! And you thought I was mean! Brilliant and frightening snapshot.

And for your other visitors who want to compare our meanness... ;)

http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/stay/

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Wakefield
5/11/2012 06:34:39 pm

;) I never said I wasn't mean

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5/11/2012 02:17:32 pm

Definitely didn't see that particular twist coming, and it was especially effective because of the mood you set leading up to it. The grandmother's wisdom is turned on its head, and the grandfather's sadness comes across as very real because of it.

Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/11/the-runaway/)

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5/11/2012 03:37:24 pm

Dear Wakefield,

Deadpan yet deadly serious, your story is a masterful cautionary tale. To say more would only detract from my attempts at praise. Really loved this.

Aloha,

Doug

http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/last-of-the-first/

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5/11/2012 04:23:55 pm

This is such a great twist on the dystopian genre. I really enjoyed this tale.

http://quillshiv.com/2012/05/11/the-first-world/

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5/11/2012 05:30:32 pm

That twist caught me unaware--WOW! Great piece. Well done.

Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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ron pruitt
5/11/2012 07:04:03 pm

Hi Wakefield,
Excellent use of dialog to develop this story and I loved the ending. I'm afraid it is prophetic. Thanks for the nice comment on my story.

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Wakefield
5/11/2012 07:06:01 pm

Thank you and you're welcome. It may be prophetic. I hope it's not.

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lora
5/12/2012 12:22:55 am

Wow...didn't expect that twist ending. I know it's not supposed to be funny and is probably prophetic (hope not)... but the line re. the gas mask and suit made me laugh. Nice work. Here's mine:
www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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5/12/2012 02:56:41 am

I was reading along thinking how very true and then wham - I wasn't expecting that, excellent!

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Russell
5/13/2012 08:58:46 am

I really liked this one. When I was young, I got so tired of hearing my elders talk about the good ol' days--now I catch myself being nostalgic. The ending made me think Grandpa was right. Excellent story.

http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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