Norman walks down by the river to remember their time together.  He feels the silky strands of her honey hair.  Her milky cheeks blushed when he kissed her hair.  Her icy blue eyes, cutting deep into his soul, quivered when he stroked her face.  He shudders at the memory of her lips, which trembled like rose petals in the breeze.  Sometimes he still hears her voice as the wind whistles through the trees.  She is still there.  She will always be with him. 

He walks down by the river to remember her, and to make sure nobody's found the body.

4/6/2012 12:15:34 am

Ah-ha. A fellow murder aficionado. Loved the twist in the tale, very good.

4/6/2012 12:42:50 am

A chilling twist to what felt like a loving tale! There's something so much more terrifying about the love felt by someone so monstrous.

Mine is this-a-way:

4/6/2012 02:13:43 am

Great images and excellent final twist--reminded me of the movie, "Sleeping With The Enemy." Well done.

Mine: www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

4/6/2012 02:36:56 am

Ahhh...I sense a bit of "if I can't have her, no one will." I always enjoy a good murder! And...such a pretty one at that.

~Susan (Here's mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com/)

4/6/2012 04:24:41 am

Great twist at the end there! Never expected that.

My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/04/06/gone/

4/6/2012 06:34:10 am

Okay, that was a real grabber at the end--loved it! Here's mine: http://mymusings-maggie.blogspot.com/2012/04/another-friday-fictioneers.html

4/6/2012 07:20:20 am

Gasp! I was lingering in the romantic thoughts, imagining being "his" girl, then "whack!" Suddenly I decided maybe not. Excellent! :)

Wakefield Mahon
4/6/2012 07:28:19 am

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was worried it might be too jarring.

4/6/2012 12:48:20 pm

Way to go with the sneaky ending. Makes me wonder if his romantic reminiscences are seen through a filter.

4/6/2012 12:53:29 pm

Ya got me! Nice job punching us at the end. I didnt expect that one from you.


4/6/2012 08:00:01 pm

I was in a trance, lapping up every romantic word...taking me back to a time so long ago...being loved that way...so young, so sensual, so pure with every soft, wispy, gentle touch...then... WHAM...You GOT me !!! Darn you! Of course, that was your intention...to take us on that ride, then have us fall. Masterful, tricky, brilliant. Here's mine:

4/7/2012 12:01:35 am

Oh wow, you were right. My story and yours could go together and make one longer piece. One in your character's pov (the murderer) and the other in mine (the murdered)
What can I say? Great minds think alike.

4/7/2012 01:32:03 am

WWicked! i must say this is wicked...i loved all the flowery words but was weary throughout the reading fearing a twist and surely i landed there...you crashed my fantasy...Well done!

4/7/2012 01:53:27 am

Lol. I can always count on you for a laugh. Brilliant last line. Gettin' all romantic and stuff. Ha! Nicely done!

4/8/2012 08:15:30 am

Darkly humourous, with some really nice romantic memories before the twist in the tale. The last line works perfectly. :-) Well done

Here's my story this week:

4/10/2012 03:03:16 am

Not that there's a 'good' kind of murderer, but he strikes me as the worst sort - one who has fond memories of the one he'd murdered. Chilling.

4/10/2012 03:28:11 am

That's what I was aiming for. :) Thanks for your comments, Madison!


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